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The graph below shows the average carbondioxide emisions per person in 5diffrent country from 1967 to 2001

The graph below shows the average carbondioxide emisions per person in 5diffrent country from 1967 to 2001 9ldpr
From the given statistic, it is apparent that in beginning of the period approximately nine metrics tones emission was caused by per person in United States, However in the Japan, around 7% carbon dioxide omission was produced by per person therefore, both figure inclined slightly in the next given years. While, Sweden produced highest carbon dioxide emission, approximately 11 metric tons was average of per person I was 1967. This statistic Declined continuously and at the end this Figure reached at around nine metric tonnsOn the other hand, with regards to Sweden average carbon dioxide emision per person, it begin at around eight metrics in 1967 then, peaked at around 8 metrics
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