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We can see the amount of electricity used on winter and summer days through this line graph and pie chart.

We can see the amount of electricity used on winter and summer days through this line graph and pie chart. VYaR3
We can see the amount of electricity used on winter and summer days through this line graph and pie chart. People use more electric energy in winter than in summer. This is because since summers are hot and winters are cold, everyone has to heat their home. Also, more electric energy is used to heat water in winter because people prefer to drink hot coffee and hot water in winter. Therefore, in the line graph, it is clear that the amount of electric energy used in winter is significantly higher than that used in summer. Now we can look at the pie chart which is divided into four parts of using the electric energy in winter. We can immediately notice that the largest part of the pie chart is occupied by houses and water heating. The electric energy that used for lighting, TV, radio is equal with the vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools. The rest of the pie chart is filled with electric energy used for ovens, kettles, washing machines.
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winter
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People
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winter
than in summer. This is
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since summers are hot and
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winters
are
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cold
, everyone
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has to
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electric
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energy
is
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used
to heat water in
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winter
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because
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people
prefer to drink hot coffee and hot water in
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winter
.
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, in the line graph, it is
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clear
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electric
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energy
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used
in
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winter
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used
in summer.

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pie
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into four parts of using the
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electric
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energy
in
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winter
. We can immediately notice that the largest part of the
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pie
chart
is occupied
by
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houses
and water heating. The
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electric
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energy
that
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used
for lighting, TV, radio is equal with the vacuum cleaners, food mixers and
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electric
tools. The rest of the
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pie
chart
is filled
with
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electric
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energy
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used
for ovens, kettles, washing machines.

IELTS academic We can see the amount of electricity used on winter and summer days through this line graph and pie chart.

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6.0
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