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The line chart below shows the result of a survey giving the reason why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

The line chart below shows the result of a survey giving the reason why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. NmM8b
The line graph demonstrates four crucial reasons proved by a survey why people moving to metropolis city of a specific country. From the graph, we can see that the employment by far is the most important issue and the adventure is the least important reason which people have to leave their home city. According to the graph, it is clear that people voting the employment are twice more than people voting for study in 2010 and it is noticeable the difference between two of which remained steady from 2000 to 2010. Finally, they reach the same amount at approximately 88, 000 people. On the other hand, people choosing family and friend are as much as people selecting adventure in 2010 at nearly more than 10, 000. But, the difference between them increases as time go by. At the end, slightly twice more people voted for family and friend than adventure. Comment
The line graph demonstrates four crucial reasons proved by a survey why
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moving to metropolis city of a specific country. From the graph, we can
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that the employment by far is the most
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issue and the adventure is the least
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their home city. According to the graph, it is
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voting the employment are twice more than
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voting for study in 2010 and it is noticeable the difference between two of which remained steady from 2000 to 2010.
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, they reach the same amount at approximately 88, 000
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choosing family and friend are as much as
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selecting adventure in 2010 at
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voted for family and friend than adventure.

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IELTS academic The line chart below shows the result of a survey giving the reason why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

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