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The bar chart represents the proportion of the city residents buying coffee or tea in five Australian cities, including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in the last four weeks.

The bar chart represents the proportion of the city residents buying coffee or tea in five Australian cities, including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in the last four weeks. D62Yk
The bar chart represents the proportion of the city residents buying coffee or tea in five Australian cities, including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in the last four weeks. The number of residents in each city differed importantly. In each of the cities shown on the graph, The proportion of people who brought fresh coffee and instant coffee followed a similar pattern during the given period. The highest percentage of the resident who brought fresh coffee was Melbourne, with merely 65%, followed by people who brought instant coffee and went to a cafe for coffee or tea, with the figure being almost a half and 43% repectively. Overall, it is clear from the chart that there was a significant difference in the number of city resident in each city.
The bar chart represents the proportion of the city
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buying
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coffee
or tea in five Australian
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cities
, including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in the last four weeks.

The number of
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residents
in each city differed
importantly
. In each of the
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cities
shown on the graph, The proportion of
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people
who brought fresh
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coffee
and instant
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coffee
followed a similar pattern during the
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given
period. The highest percentage of the
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resident
who brought fresh
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coffee
was Melbourne, with
merely
65%, followed by
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people
who brought instant
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coffee
and went to a
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cafe
for
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coffee
or tea, with the figure being almost a half and 43%
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repectively
.

Overall
, it is
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clear
from the chart that there was a significant difference in the number of city
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resident
in each city.
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IELTS academic The bar chart represents the proportion of the city residents buying coffee or tea in five Australian cities, including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in the last four weeks.

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