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The line and table illustrate information about the theatre attendance in Australia and also depicted the average theatre visit of separate age group between 1996 and 2000

The line and table illustrate information about the theatre attendance in Australia and also depicted the average theatre visit of separate age group between 1996 and 2000 BJDYw
Overall the lion and table about the theatre attendance in Australia and overall it is clear that the maximum percentage had been remained stable of the cinema attendance in 1997 1998 and 2000 while the minimum percentile had been decreased of the cinema visit in 1996 on the one hand the proportion was declined of the cinema attendance in 1996 that was 62% but after two years the percentage had been remain stable of the attendance of population between 1997 and 1998 meanwhile around 10. 3 people had been cinema visit of all age groups in 1996 but after one year the average of cinema visit was slightly increased in 1997 that was 11% moreover approximately cinema visit had been stabilized in 1998 and 2008 was 8. 3 % on the other hand the percentage had been in client of the cinema visit in 4224 age group that was nearly 20% from 1997 but after one year the percentage had been decreased of the same age group in 1998 which was approximately 15% for the more the proportion had been depicted fluctuated of the 3549 age group in among the all age groups
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theatre
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attendance
in Australia and
overall
it is
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clear
that the maximum
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percentage
had
been remained
stable of the
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cinema
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attendance
in 1997 1998 and 2000 while the minimum percentile had
been decreased
of the
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cinema
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visit
in 1996 on the one hand the proportion
was declined
of the
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cinema
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attendance
in 1996 that was 62%
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but
after two years the
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percentage
had been
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attendance
of population between 1997 and 1998 meanwhile around 10. 3
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people
had been
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cinema
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visit
of all
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age
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groups
in 1996
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but
after one year the average of
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cinema
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visit
was
slightly
increased in 1997 that was 11%
moreover
approximately
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cinema
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visit
had
been stabilized
in 1998 and 2008 was 8. 3 %
on the other hand
the
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percentage
had been in client of the
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cinema
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visit
in 4224
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age
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group
that was
nearly
20% from 1997
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but
after one year the
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percentage
had
been decreased
of the same
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age
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group
in 1998 which was approximately 15% for the more the proportion had
been depicted
fluctuated of the 3549
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age
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group
in among the all
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age
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groups

IELTS academic The line and table illustrate information about the theatre attendance in Australia and also depicted the average theatre visit of separate age group between 1996 and 2000

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6.0
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