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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. M0K6
The line graph shows the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities between 2001 and 2010. All in all, we can able to see that Australian universities are more popular than the overseas student's starting with the entry of 20, 000 students and it's inclined to 40, 000 over a four year period between 2005 to 2010 the registration doubled and leads to a range of 80, 000 above at the end of 2010. By contrast, the local student population is always less in range comparative to overseas. In 2001, they were 15, 000 students studying at universities the enrolment reaches 20, 000 in the mid of 2006-2007. The enrolment jump to 40, 000 at the end of 2008 and the range same till date. So it's clear the Australian students are not interested to enroll themselves in their country's own institution. the fact is clear bot the type of students is not interested to enroll themselves in their country's own university.
The line graph
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the
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enrolments
of overseas
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students
and local
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students
in Australian
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universities
between 2001 and 2010.

All in all, we
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can able to
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see
that Australian
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universities
are more popular than the overseas student's starting with the entry of 20, 000
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students
and it's inclined to 40, 000 over a
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four year
period
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between 2005 to 2010
the registration doubled and leads to a range of 80, 000 above at the
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end
of 2010.

By contrast, the local
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student
population is always less in range comparative to overseas. In 2001, they were 15, 000
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students
studying at
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universities
the
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enrolment
reaches 20, 000 in the mid of 2006-2007. The
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enrolment
jump to 40, 000 at the
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end
of 2008 and the range same till date.

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So
it's
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clear
the Australian
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students
are not interested to enroll themselves in their country's
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own
institution.
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the
fact is
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clear
bot the type of
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students
is not interested to enroll themselves in their country's
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own
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university
.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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4 paragraphs
165 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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