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The bar chart below the number of people 5 big countries between 2004 and 2007

The bar chart below the number of people 5 big countries between 2004 and 2007 E7LJr

The bar chart illustrates the number of people who emigrated to five destinations over the period 2004 to 2007 in the popular places named AUSTRALIA, Spain, New Zealand, USA, France. Overall, it can be seen that AUSTRALIA famous for it is emigration which was stood over 40, 000 people in 2004 but, in 2007 France was as low as than other four countries. Additionally, in 2004, four countries emigration fluctuated. AUSTRALIA, Spain cities emigration was higher than the New Zealand, USA and France. In 2006 and 2007 AUSTRALIA fluctuated between 52-42, 000 people over the period. Approximately 31, 000and 29, 000 people emigrated to Spain. Also France opposite was true for USA. Although the number of visitors to France spiked to nearly 35, 000 in 2005 but, France was suddenly dropped 15, 000people in 2007. USA and New Zealand were the least popular to emigrated to at the end of the period, at just under 20, 000and 25, 000 people.

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