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the information about world population

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The two pie chart provide an information concerning the world population in seven regions such as North America, Europe and Asia Pacific in 1900 and 2000 As can be seen from both of the pie charts, the changing proportion of population significantly rose from 1. 6 billion to 6 billion. In the both year studied, the highest percentage of the population was Asia Pacific. It is clearly seen from the graph that the quantity of population in two regions: Africa and Latin America slightly increased. The percentage of people in Africa boost up from 4% in 1900 to 10% in 2000. In Latin America, the number of population in 2000 also increased 5% compared with the population in 1900. Moreover, the two pie charts also show a decreased number of population in Asia Pacific and Europe. The Asian population slightly dropped from 60% to 54% and the European population declined from 25% to 14%. On the other hand, The number of population in North America in 1900 and 2000 was roughly the same. In addition, the notable difference between the two year surveyed is the percentage of Middle East and North Africa which shown only in 2000 with 6%.
The two pie chart provide an information concerning the world
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population
in seven regions such as North America, Europe and Asia Pacific in 1900 and 2000

As can be
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seen
from both of the pie charts, the changing proportion of
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population
significantly
rose from 1. 6 billion to 6 billion. In the both year studied, the highest percentage of the
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population
was Asia Pacific.

It is
clearly
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seen
from the graph that the quantity of
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population
in two regions: Africa and Latin America
slightly
increased. The percentage of
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people
in Africa boost up from 4% in 1900 to 10% in 2000. In Latin America, the number of
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population
in 2000
also
increased 5% compared with the
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population
in 1900.
Moreover
, the two pie charts
also
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show
a decreased number of
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population
in Asia Pacific and Europe. The Asian
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slightly
dropped from 60% to 54% and the European
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population
declined from 25% to 14%.

On the other hand
, The number of
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population
in North America in 1900 and 2000 was roughly the same.
In addition
, the notable difference between the two year surveyed is the percentage
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of Middle East
and North Africa which shown
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only
in 2000 with 6%.
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IELTS academic the information about world population

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4 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
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