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The information about the Australian men and women of various age groups involved in regular physical activity in 2010 is depicted by the rendered bar graph.

The information about the Australian men and women of various age groups involved in regular physical activity in 2010 is depicted by the rendered bar graph. Yge1j
The information about the Australian men and women of various age groups involved in regular physical activity in 2010 is depicted by the rendered bar graph. The data has been calibrated in percentage. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the percentage of female doing regular physical activities outnumbered the male in most age groups except one age group where male percentage was slightly more as compared to female, the gender gap for each age group was not significant. Beginning with the Australian women, it can be clearly observed that the female in most of the age groups outweigh male in doing physical activity whereas in case of 15 to 24 age group female population is less as compared to male. Looking specifically at the percentage of male involved in daily physical activity is less in most of the age groups except the 15 to 24 age group where men were doing more activity in comparison to women
The information about the Australian
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groups
involved in regular
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physical
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activity
in 2010
is depicted
by the rendered bar graph. The data has
been calibrated
in percentage.

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, what stands out from the graph is that the percentage of
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female
doing regular
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physical
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activities
outnumbered the male in most
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age
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groups
except one
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age
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group
where male percentage was
slightly
more
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as
compared to
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female
, the gender gap for each
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age
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group
was not significant.

Beginning with the Australian women, it can be
clearly
observed that the
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female
in most of the
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age
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groups
outweigh male in doing
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physical
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activity
whereas in case of 15 to 24
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age
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group
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female
population is less
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as
compared to male.

Looking
specifically
at the percentage of male involved in daily
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physical
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activity
is less in most of the
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age
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groups
except the 15 to 24
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age
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where
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men
were doing more
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activity
in comparison
to women
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IELTS academic The information about the Australian men and women of various age groups involved in regular physical activity in 2010 is depicted by the rendered bar graph.

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