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The bar chart below gives information about the number of televisions and computers per 1000 people in selected countries.

The bar chart below gives information about the number of televisions and computers per 1000 people in selected countries. J09NE
What is compared in the bar chart is the data about the figure for televisions and computers owned by 1000 people in listed countries. It is obvious that the USA has the highest number of both categories, which is in stark contrast with the Philippines. Moreover, televisions are always at a higher level than computers in all given countries, except for South Korea. To be specific, about nearly 800 televisions belonged to 1000 people in the USA, which is the greatest figure. France ranked at second place, with approximately 200 smaller. Furthermore, Sweden and the UK have the same number of televisions as each other, accounting for 500, while that of South Korea and Saudi Arabia are insignificant, taking up over 300 and 200 respectively. Besides, the lowest figure is documented in the Philippines, which is just a small data of the total It is clear from the chart that there are nearly similar figures for computers in the USA and Sweden, with approximately over 500. Similarly, the UK and France follow the same patterns as the former, which has nearly 300 computers possessed by 1000 people in each country. South Korea is the only country on the list that has the number of computers higher than television, with 400 as opposed to 300. The Philippines and Saudi Arabia are the two countries that had the least computers among other countries.
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is compared
in the bar chart is the data about the
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televisions
and computers
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owned
by 1000
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people
in listed countries.

It is obvious that the USA has the highest number of both categories, which is in stark contrast with the Philippines.
Moreover
,
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televisions
are always at a higher level than computers in all
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given
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countries
,
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except for
South Korea.

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nearly
800
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televisions
belonged to 1000
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people
in the USA, which is the greatest
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figure
. France ranked at second place, with approximately 200 smaller.
Furthermore
, Sweden and the UK have the same number of
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televisions
as each other, accounting for 500, while that of South Korea and Saudi Arabia are insignificant, taking up over 300 and 200
respectively
.
Besides
, the lowest
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is documented
in the Philippines, which is
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a
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small
data of the total

It is
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clear
from the chart that there are
nearly
similar
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figures
for computers in the USA and Sweden, with approximately over 500.
Similarly
, the UK and France follow the same patterns as the former, which has
nearly
300 computers possessed by 1000
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people
in each
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. South Korea is the
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country
on the list that has the number of computers higher than
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television
, with 400 as opposed to 300. The Philippines and Saudi Arabia are the two
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countries
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