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The chart below show figures for attendence care department in norther irland by age group in 16december and 17december.

The chart below show figures for attendence care department in norther irland by age group in 16december and 17december. 0AYx9
The bar chart depicts that information about the attendance of people at hospital emergency care department in Northern irland by 6 age groups and tbe period taken into consideration is december 2016 to december 2017. A glance at picture apparently delineates that above 75 age group mostly visited at hospital and lower level of children went to hospital of age group 5 to 15. Moving into details, the age group 16 to 14 and 45 to 64, In december 2016, around 30thousands population attended at emergency department and In december 2017, the ratio inclined slightly which was more than 30, 000 population. coming towards age category of 5 to 15, In december 2016, the population was about 20, 000 and In year 2017, there was no any significant changes occured. Moving into rest of details, the childrens under 5, In year december 2016, more than 50 thousands population of childrens went to hospital. However, In year 2017, the ratio went up and reached at 55, 000 whereas the masses above than 60, 000 visited to emergency care department in 2016 and In year 2017, the figures grew which was 65, 000 population present at moment on the other hand, the age group 65 to 74, In year 2016 and 2017, only 25, 000 attended at hospital.
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and lower level of children went to
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5 to 15.

Moving into
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16 to 14 and 45 to 64, In
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attended at emergency department and In
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category of 5 to 15, In
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was about 20, 000 and In
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2017, the ratio went up and reached at 55, 000 whereas the masses
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2017, the figures grew which was 65, 000
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65 to 74, In
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