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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced.

The follow chart gives information about manufacturing chocolate. It is clear that they are 10 stages in the process starting with growing pods and end with pressing the production. Half works are done by hand and half of them by machine. Cocoa trees are especially grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. All ripe red pods are harvested. Inside of pods have white cocoa beans which is main source of chocolate are separated. In the next stage they are fermented and lay out them to dry. Dried beans are put in large sacks. Production are delivered to a nearby factory by train or lorry. In the factory they are roasted at 350 °C. After this stage beans are crushed and outer shell are removed. Finally, inner part of beans are pressed by specular press machine in order to produce liquid chocolate.
The follow chart gives information about manufacturing chocolate. It is
clear
that they are 10 stages in the process starting with growing pods and
end
with pressing the production. Half works
are done
by hand and half of them by machine. Cocoa trees are
especially
grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia. All ripe red pods
are harvested
. Inside of pods have white cocoa
beans
which is main source of chocolate
are separated
. In the
next
stage they
are fermented
and lay out them to dry. Dried
beans
are put
in large sacks. Production
are delivered
to a nearby factory by train or lorry. In the factory they
are roasted
at 350 °C. After this stage
beans
are crushed
and outer shell
are removed
.
Finally
, inner part of
beans
are pressed
by specular press machine in order to produce liquid chocolate.
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IELTS academic The illustrations show how chocolate is produced.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
140 words
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