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The illustration shows how oils been made

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The graph illustrates the process by which oil and fat are made for people’s consumption. Overall, the process includes 9 stages in total from the harvesting of the materials from trees to the packaging and sale of the finished product. The stages largely entail cleaning and purifying. In the first step, raw materials are transported to the silo on ships or boats. The following stages have happened in the silo. Then it is being crushed and milled and passed to the pressing machine. After that, it is filtered and steamed and different kinds of oil have been produced. The types of edible oils and fat are sunflower oil, coconut oil, and refined oils. In the next stage, the oils and fats are being packaged in bottles or boxes for delivery. And finally, edible oils and fat are transported to supermarkets or shops in various places for individual consumers or wholesalers.
The graph illustrates the process by which
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oil
and
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fat
are made
for
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people
’s consumption.

Overall
, the process includes 9
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stages
in total from the harvesting of the materials from trees to the packaging and sale of the finished product. The
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stages
largely
entail cleaning and purifying.

In the
first
step, raw materials
are transported
to the silo on ships or boats. The following
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stages
have happened in the silo. Then it is
being crushed
and milled and passed to the pressing machine. After that, it
is filtered
and steamed and
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different
kinds of
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oil
have
been produced
. The types of edible
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oils
and
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fat
are sunflower
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oil
, coconut
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oil
, and refined
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oils
. In the
next
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stage
, the
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oils
and
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fats
are
being packaged
in bottles or boxes for delivery. And
finally
, edible
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oils
and
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fat
are transported
to supermarkets or shops in various places for individual consumers or wholesalers.
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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