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The graph compares the income of four coffee shops in New York over a period of the previous year.

The graph compares the income of four coffee shops in New York over a period of the previous year. EqArL
The graph compares the income of four coffee shops in New York over a period of the previous year. It can be seen from the graph that the overall trend was upward. All figures experienced a sharp growth except for The Tea Room. From January to March, the earnings of the Tea Room climbed slightly from 160, 000 dollars to the highest point of approximately 180, 000 dollars, followed by a sharp decline of 75, 000 dollars in the last nine months. By contrast, after rising slowly by 10, 000 dollars from 50, 000 dollars in the first five months, the figure for Wi-fi Café witnessed a dramatic growth to about 190, 000 dollars in December to become the highest in the chart. When it comes to Internet Express, the cafe’s income fell minimally from 100, 000 dollars to 80, 000 dollars in April, remaining constant in the next three months and then recovered and increased considerably to 140, 000 dollars at the end of the period. Similarly, that of the Café Cool fluctuated between 20, 000 dollars and 40, 000 dollars in the first six months after experiencing a sudden upturn to 120, 000 dollars in December.
The graph compares the income of four coffee shops in New York over a period of the previous year.

It can be
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seen
from the graph that the
overall
trend was upward. All figures experienced a sharp growth
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except for
The Tea Room.

From January to March, the earnings of the Tea Room climbed
slightly
from 160, 000
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dollars
to the highest point of approximately 180, 000
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dollars
, followed by a sharp decline of 75, 000
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dollars
in the last nine
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months
. By contrast, after rising
slowly
by 10, 000
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dollars
from 50, 000
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dollars
in the
first
five
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months
, the figure for
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Wi-fi
Café witnessed a dramatic growth to about 190, 000
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dollars
in December to become the highest in the chart.

When it
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comes
to Internet Express, the
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cafe
’s income fell
minimally
from 100, 000
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dollars
to 80, 000
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dollars
in April, remaining constant in the
next
three
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months
and then recovered and increased
considerably
to 140, 000
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dollars
at the
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end
of the period.
Similarly
, that of the Café Cool fluctuated between 20, 000
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dollars
and 40, 000
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dollars
in the
first
six
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months
after experiencing a sudden upturn to 120, 000
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dollars
in December.

IELTS academic The graph compares the income of four coffee shops in New York over a period of the previous year.

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