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The illustration below depict the process of how liquid chocolate is made.

The illustration below depict the process of how liquid chocolate is made. 3WLXw
The illustration below depict the process of how liquid chocolate is made. Overall, it is a eight stage, man-made, and linear process, commencing from harvesting sugar canes from its plants and culminating with delivering ready-made to supermarkets, by using sugarcanes and related equipment and tools. First of all, rip red pods are harvested from cacao tree. Secondly, a white beans are differ from pods harvested, and from this, it is fermented; thenь beans fermented are spread in the sun to dry. After that, those beans are put in large sacks. Subsequently, the beans in the sacks are transported by train or lorry to factory. Next, the beans are roasted at 350 C. now that the crushed beans are removed from out shell. Finally, inner part pressed liquid chocolate produced.
The illustration below depict the process of how liquid chocolate
is made
.

Overall
, it is
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a
eight stage,
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man
-made, and linear process, commencing from harvesting sugar canes from its plants and culminating with delivering ready-made to supermarkets, by using
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sugarcanes
and related equipment and tools.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, rip red pods
are harvested
from cacao tree.
Secondly
, a white
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beans
are
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differ
from pods harvested, and from this, it
is fermented
;
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thenь
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beans
fermented
are spread
in the sun to dry. After that, those
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beans
are put
in large sacks.

Subsequently
, the
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beans
in the sacks
are transported
by train or lorry to factory.
Next
, the
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beans
are roasted
at 350 C.
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now
that the crushed
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beans
are removed
from out shell.
Finally
, inner part pressed liquid chocolate produced.
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IELTS academic The illustration below depict the process of how liquid chocolate is made.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
129 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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