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The illustration below depict the process of how bricks are made.

The illustration below depict the process of how bricks are made. EqdBB
The illustration below depict the process of how bricks are made. Overall, it is a seven stage, man-made, and linear process, commencing with digging out clay from the ground and culminating with delivering ready-made bricks to construction sites and market my using clay, water, cement and related tools. First of all, clay is digged from the ground by using excavator. Secondly, a sand is differed from the stones by metal grid on roller, and from this, the sand is mixed with water. It is then placed into wire cutter or mould to manufacture the bricks. Subsequently, those bricks are put into the oven to dry it for 24 to 48 hours. After that, it is entered to kiln which is 200 C to 980 C; then, the bricks are transfer to next temperature kiln at 870 C to 1300 C. Now that it is cooled in chamber for 48 hours to 72 hours. Next, the bricks are packaged as final product to be deliver to construction
The illustration below depict the process of how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are made
.

Overall
, it is a seven stage,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
-made, and linear process, commencing with digging out clay from the ground and culminating with delivering ready-made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
to construction sites and market my using clay, water, cement and related tools.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, clay is
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digged
from the ground by using excavator.
Secondly
,
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "sand".
a sand
is differed
from the stones by metal grid on roller, and from this, the sand
is mixed
with water. It is then placed into wire cutter or
Possible spelling mistake. 'mould' is British English.
mould
to manufacture the bricks.

Subsequently
, those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are put
into the oven to dry it for 24 to 48 hours. After that, it
is entered
to kiln which is 200 C to 980 C; then, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are transfer to
next
temperature kiln at 870 C to 1300 C.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
that it
is cooled
in chamber for 48 hours to 72 hours.
Next
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bricks
are packaged
as final product to be
Consider using a past participle here: "delivered".
deliver
to construction
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IELTS academic The illustration below depict the process of how bricks are made.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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