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Mode of transport and years

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The given diagram shows data about the number of percentage of commuters of different modes of transportation in one European city between 1960, 1980 and 2000. Overall, the number of people using cars which is growing from 1960 to 2000. However, transport of commuters using bus had decreased considerably from 1960 to 2000. The number of people using trains rose just under 20% in 1960 to about 26% in 1980, however, then fell back to about 23% in 2000. On the other hand, use of the tube has decreased from about 27% in 1960 to 22% in 1980, then climbing back to reach 25% in 2000. Meanwhile, the use of cars increased sharply from about 7% in 1960 to 23% in 1980 and then rising quickly to almost 40% by 2000. On the contrary, the number of people using buses has declined rapidly since 1960, falling from just under 35% in 1960 to 27% in 1980 and reaching only 15% in 2000.
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modes of transportation in one European city between 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Overall
, the
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number
of
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people
using cars which is growing from 1960 to 2000.
However
, transport of commuters using bus had decreased
considerably
from 1960 to 2000.

The
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number
of
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people
using trains rose
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under 20% in 1960 to about 26% in 1980,
however
, then fell back to about 23% in 2000.
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,
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use
of the tube has decreased from about 27% in 1960 to 22% in 1980, then climbing back to reach 25% in 2000. Meanwhile, the
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use
of cars increased
sharply
from about 7% in 1960 to 23% in 1980 and then rising
quickly
to almost 40% by 2000.
On the contrary
, the
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number
of
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people
using buses has declined
rapidly
since 1960, falling from
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under 35% in 1960 to 27% in 1980 and reaching
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15% in 2000.
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IELTS academic Mode of transport and years

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6.5
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