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The given pie charts illustrate energy consumption allocation in Australian households and corresponding amounts of caused greenhouse gas emissions.

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The given pie charts illustrate energy consumption allocation in Australian households and corresponding amounts of caused greenhouse gas emissions. Overall, more the half of total energy usage is consumed by the central heating and water heating. In particularly, the former one consumes about two-fifth of total energy usage, resulting in a minority of gas emissions (15%). Turning to the latter emission source, 30% of total is allotted to water heating, which subsequently causes more than a third of total gases emitted. At the same time, nearly one sixth of total energy consumption is allotted to another appliances, which, however, make up one of the greatest proportions representing 28% of total greenhouse gasses emitted. Meanwhile, refrigerating, which makes only 7% of total energy consumed, results in the third greatest greenhouse gases source making up nearly 15% Turning to other categories, the smallest proportion of energy used and gases emitted is apportioned to cooling and lighting appliances with approximately 3% and 5% respectively regarding to both considered cases.
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pie charts illustrate
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consumption allocation in Australian households and corresponding amounts of caused greenhouse gas emissions.

Overall
, more the half of
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total
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energy
usage
is consumed
by the central heating and water heating. In
particularly
, the former one consumes about two-fifth of
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total
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energy
usage, resulting in a minority of gas emissions (15%). Turning to the latter emission source, 30% of
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total
is allotted
to water heating, which
subsequently
causes more than a third of
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total
gases emitted.

At the same time,
nearly
one sixth of
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total
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energy
consumption
is allotted
to another appliances, which,
however
,
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make
up one of the greatest proportions representing 28% of
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total
greenhouse gasses emitted. Meanwhile, refrigerating, which
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makes
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only
7% of
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total
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consumed, results in the third greatest greenhouse gases source making up
nearly
15%

Turning to other categories, the smallest proportion of
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energy
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used
and gases emitted
is apportioned
to cooling and lighting appliances with approximately 3% and 5%
respectively
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both considered cases.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate energy consumption allocation in Australian households and corresponding amounts of caused greenhouse gas emissions.

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