Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations.

The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations. KWa09
The given bar chart illustrates the statistics of travelers to Australia among three different counties, namely the UK, the USA and Japan during the period between 1995 and 2000, while the line chart below represents the trend of two categories of traveling from 1995 to 2005. Overall, it is salient that the total number of tourists had experienced a significant growth except for Japan. On the other hand, the majority of the people would prefer to spend their vacation by travel agency rather than backpacking in the given period. More specifically, Japan occupied the first position at the start of the year, at 1. 4 million, while drastically eclipsed to roughly 0. 7 million at the end of the year. The UK and the USA, on the other hand, shared an exactly identical pattern at nearly 1. 4 million, overtaking the quantities of Japan and becoming the highest section in 2000. Last but equally crucial, the figure of travel agencies began at 9 billion in 1995, reaching its peak at approximately 15 billion in 2000 and dramatically declined to 7 billion in 2005. In stark contrast, however, backpacking saw a constant increase from merely 3 billion in the beginning to 6 billion in the end.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
bar chart illustrates the statistics of travelers to Australia among three
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
counties,
namely
the UK, the USA and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Japan
during the period between 1995 and 2000, while the line chart below represents the trend of two categories of traveling from 1995 to 2005.

Overall
, it is salient that the total number of tourists had experienced a significant growth
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
except for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Japan
.
On the other hand
, the majority of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would prefer to spend their vacation by travel agency
rather
than backpacking in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
period.

More
specifically
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Japan
occupied the
first
position at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of the year, at 1. 4 million, while
drastically
eclipsed to roughly 0. 7 million at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the year. The UK and the USA,
on the other hand
, shared an exactly identical pattern at
nearly
1. 4 million, overtaking the quantities of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Japan
and becoming the highest section in 2000.

Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
equally
crucial, the figure of travel agencies began at 9
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
in 1995, reaching its peak at approximately 15
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
in 2000 and
dramatically
declined to 7
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
in 2005. In stark contrast,
however
, backpacking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a constant increase from
merely
3
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
in the beginning to 6
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.

IELTS academic The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations.