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The graphs provide the average weekly income of both the genders of different age groups for both graduates and non graduates.

The graphs provide the average weekly income of both the genders of different age groups for both graduates and non graduates. Eq85M
The graphs provide the average weekly income of both the genders of different age groups for both graduates and non graduates. The weekly earnings of both graduates and non-graduate men are increasing gradually with the increase of age. In contrast to the men, the earnings of women graduates had increased at 20's and tend to decrease in 30's. A common average earnings of 400$ is maintained from 30 to 50 age groups. The non-graduate women earnings increased at 30's and then a common average is maintained.
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age groups for both graduates and non graduates.

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earnings
of both graduates and non-graduate
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men
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with the increase of age.

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to the
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, the
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earnings
of women graduates had increased at
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20's
and tend to decrease in
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30's
. A common average
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earnings
of
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400$
is maintained
from 30 to 50 age groups. The non-graduate women
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earnings
increased at
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30's
and then a common average
is maintained
.
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IELTS academic The graphs provide the average weekly income of both the genders of different age groups for both graduates and non graduates.

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