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The graphs illustrates the differences in average household profits from 1965 to 2015.

The graphs illustrates the differences in average household profits from 1965 to 2015. 1NqA
The graphs illustrates the differences in average household profits from 1965 to 2015. Accommodation, recreation, food, gas, electricity, savings and home improving. Distribution of incomes is shown in percentages. Overal, the highest present of distribution goes to accommodation as the lowest goes to home improvement. The graph shows changes every 5 years. On the graph we can see accommodation takes 1st place in distribution as it’s persantage is 15-20%, whereas home improvement is last with about 25%. On the other hand, we clearly see how savings distribution was higher in 1965 but by 2015 it’s second lowest from the bottom with about 25%. Third, fourth, fifth are very close to each other as accommodation, food, transport, gas/electricity are about 5% by 2015
The graphs
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the differences in average household profits from 1965 to
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2015. Accommodation
, recreation, food, gas, electricity, savings and home improving.
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Distribution
of incomes
is shown
in percentages.

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, the highest present of
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distribution
goes to
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accommodation
as the lowest
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improvement. The graph
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shows
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every 5 years. On the graph we can
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see
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accommodation
takes 1st place in
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distribution
as it’s
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persantage
is 15-20%, whereas home improvement is last with about 25%.

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, we
clearly
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see
how savings
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distribution
was higher in 1965
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but
by 2015 it’s second lowest from the bottom with about 25%. Third, fourth, fifth are
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close to each other as
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accommodation
, food, transport, gas/electricity are about 5% by 2015
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IELTS academic The graphs illustrates the differences in average household profits from 1965 to 2015.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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