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The table below gives information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia. OXBj
The given table illustrates the number of religion and civil marriages along with the average age of bride and groom from 1960 to 2000 in Australia. It is clearly seen that the number of religion marriages fluctuated, whereas the number of civil marriages grew over the period of four decades. In 1960, the number of religion marriages was 25000, which increased slightly to 28000 in 1970, after which the number rose dramatically to an all time high of 50000 by 1980. However, religion marriages showed a drastic fall and reached 32000 in 1990, after which the number picked up slightly to 34000 by 2000. The number of civil marriages grew 5 times from 8000 in 1960, to 40000 in 2000. The average age of the bride was 21 in 1960, but increased steadily to 30 years by 2000. The average age of the groom escalated from 24 to 32 over the given period of time. Overall, it can be seen that civil marriages grew in popularity over the years, and in both genders the average age of marriage increased
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table illustrates the
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of religion and
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civil
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marriages
along with the average

age of bride and groom from 1960 to 2000 in Australia. It is
clearly
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seen
that the
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number
of

religion
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marriages
fluctuated, whereas the
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number
of
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civil
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marriages
grew over the period of

four decades.

In 1960, the
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number
of religion
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marriages
was 25000, which increased
slightly
to 28000 in

1970, after which the
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number
rose
dramatically
to an
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all time
high of 50000 by 1980.

However
, religion
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marriages
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showed
a drastic fall and reached 32000 in 1990, after which the

number picked up
slightly
to 34000 by 2000. The
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number
of
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civil
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marriages
grew 5 times

from 8000 in 1960, to 40000 in 2000.

The average age of the bride was 21 in 1960,
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increased
steadily
to 30 years by 2000.
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average age of the groom escalated from 24 to 32 over the
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period of time.

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, it can be
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seen
that
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civil
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marriages
grew in popularity over the years, and in both

genders the average age of
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marriage
increased
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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