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The line graph below shows the number of birds of different types sighted at Bharatpur Bird Sanctuary between 2001 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of birds of different types sighted at Bharatpur Bird Sanctuary between 2001 and 2014. kOKN
The given line graph illustrates information about how many three different species of birds: kingfisher, black beak pelican and flamingo were observed at Bharatpur Bird Sanctuary over a fourteen-year period between 2001 and 2014. At first glance, despite some fluctuation, all of the species saw a gradual increase over the period in question. Moreover, flamingoes were observed the most, while kingfishers were the least number of bird flown to the spot throughout the whole time. Looking into the details, the number of flamingoes started at around 3000 in 2001, which was the highest number among the three types of these flying animals. The figure experienced an upward trend until 2005, where it hit a plateau at approximately 9000 for three years. At this point, it soared to just over 12000, which kept flamingoes the most observed bird of three types. Similarly, there was a surge in the number of black beak pelicans up to nearly 7000 in 2005 from just over 1000 in 2001. After seeing a negligible decline, it peaked at just under 8000 in 2014. As regards kingfisher, which had less observation than the other two over the whole period, the figure had constant growth from almost none in 2001 to 4000 individuals in 2014, which was four times higher than before.
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: kingfisher, black beak pelican and flamingo
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Bharatpur
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Bird
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a fourteen-year period between 2001 and 2014.

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all of the
species
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a gradual increase
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over
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flamingoes
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the most, while kingfishers were the least
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number
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bird
flown to the spot throughout the whole time.

Looking into the
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flamingoes
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at around 3000 in 2001, which was the highest
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among the three types of these flying animals. The figure experienced an upward trend until 2005, where it hit a plateau at approximately 9000 for three years. At this point, it soared to
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12000, which
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kept
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flamingoes
the most observed
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bird
of three types.
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of black beak pelicans up to
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7000 in 2005 from
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1000 in 2001. After seeing a negligible decline, it peaked at
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under 8000 in 2014.

As regards kingfisher, which had less observation than the other two
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the whole period, the figure had constant growth from almost none in 2001 to 4000 individuals in 2014, which was four times higher than
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of birds of different types sighted at Bharatpur Bird Sanctuary between 2001 and 2014.

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