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The graphs below shows the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 who participated in organized cultural activiies and sports in 2003 in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below shows the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 who participated in organized cultural activiies and sports in 2003 in Australia. aq8PV
The bar graphs illustrate comparison in the proportion of boys and girls aged 5-14 participating in cultural activities and sports in 2003 in a specific country Australia. Overall, more girls joined cultural events as campred to boys, however, games were played by more boys than girls. On having the cursory glance, the percentage of girls, who enrolled in dancing was the higher at 25 than that of boys. The figure for drama and singing was same to 5%. The preportion of boys participating in play musical instruments was 15%, whereas only 10% girls played these tools. Proceeding further, games were played by 70% boys and 50 % girls joined it and it was the most popular enterprise among boys and girls.
The bar graphs illustrate comparison in the proportion of
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aged 5-14 participating in cultural activities and sports in 2003 in a specific country Australia.

Overall
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than girls.

On having the cursory glance, the percentage of
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, who enrolled in dancing was the higher at 25 than that of
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. The figure for drama and singing was same to 5%. The
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preportion
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participating in play musical instruments was 15%, whereas
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played these tools.

Proceeding
further
, games
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by 70%
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boys
and 50 %
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it and it was the most popular enterprise among
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IELTS academic The graphs below shows the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 who participated in organized cultural activiies and sports in 2003 in Australia.

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