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The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in summer and winter Olympics

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in summer and winter Olympics jJAa
The graph gives the information about the medals which was won by five different countries during summer and winter olympics. Overall, Three countries, United states, Russia and Germany had won many of medals in both Olympics where as Norway and Canada was failed to got maximum medals in summer moreover Britan and France had not succeeded to win highest ranking medals during winter Olympics. Firstly, In winter Olympics Norway performing very well all time and succed to get more than 350 medals where as Russia manage to get almost 180 medals. And rest U. S, Russia and Canada had won almost 300, 250 and 200 medals respectively. Secondly, The consistency of United States to gain medals in summer is more compare to winter. They stood first in summer and got almost 2500 medal which was more than the sum of France and Britain. Germany misses second rank by almost 200 medals hence Russia was the second and had almost 1800 medals.
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