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The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in summer and winter Olympics

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in summer and winter Olympics Ak2x
The Pie chart gives the information about different age group watching television on different devices in Canada during the year 2009 and 2019. Overall, There was a dramatic change of preferences of devices like in 2019 maximum people uses mobile to watch T. V whereas, in year 2009 people were using conventional T. V. Firstly, In year 2009 bunch of people were using conventional Television for watching programs. 20% People were using Laptops and very little percentage of people used tablet for their favourite program. For example, 5% were using tablet, 8% were using flate tv, and rest 32% were using mobile phone and desktop computer. On the other hand, In the year 2019 almost one-Fourth part of the generation was watching their show via Flate TV and mobile phones whereas, the trend of conventional TV was changed occassionally from 32% to 4% during 2009 to 2019. Other were using tablet, desktop computer and laptop upto 19%, 12% and 12% respectively.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in summer and winter Olympics

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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