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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. qPGG
The provided diagrams demonstrate the enrolment trends of foreign and locals strudents in Australian higher educational institutions. It can be seen that the number of local students increased with lower rates than that of overseas students. Looking at the details, the total number of students enrolled from other countries is less than local ones over the given span. It starts at 20, 000 in 2001 and reaches its peak at 80, 000 students by 2010. The trend for the commencing foreign students is coherent with the total number of students, except the period between 2009 and 2010, where it varied around 40, 000. The local number of students was 400, 000 in 2001 and plateued by 2007 at 600, 000. In contrast to the number commencing foreign students, the number of commencing local ones remained steady with slight fluctuations throughout the given 10 years. Overall, it is obvious that the number of local students entered the Australian universities several times more than that of foreigners. Despite this large difference, the number of overseas students kept increasing, whereas, the trend for the total number of local students remained stable after 2007.
The provided diagrams demonstrate the
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trends of foreign and
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locals
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strudents
in Australian higher educational institutions. It can be
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seen
that the
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number
of
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local
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students
increased with lower rates than that of overseas students.

Looking at the
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, the total
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of
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enrolled from other countries is less than
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ones over the
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span. It
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at 20, 000 in 2001 and reaches its peak at 80, 000
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students
by 2010. The trend for the commencing foreign
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is coherent with the total
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number
of
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students
, except the period between 2009 and 2010, where it varied around 40, 000.

The
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local
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of
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was 400, 000 in 2001 and
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by 2007 at 600, 000.
In contrast
to the
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commencing foreign
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students
, the
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of commencing
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ones remained steady with slight fluctuations throughout the
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10 years.

Overall
, it is obvious that the
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local
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students
entered the Australian universities several times more than that of foreigners. Despite this large difference, the
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number
of overseas
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students
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kept
increasing, whereas, the trend for the total
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of
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remained stable after 2007.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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