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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time 10qL
According to a survey conducted on the number of males and females in Britain who opt for higher education, either full-time or part-time, is summarised in the above bar graph. Overall, it is clear that the highest number of male individuals who are enrolled full-time, was in the year 1970, However, regarding female individuals, the highest number of full-time enrolment was reported in the year 1990s. On the other hand, in case of part-time education, both the genders saw a relatively higher number of enrollment in the year 1990. In case of men, more and more students preferred to study part-time over the years as compared to full-time where the total number of students has decreased slightly from 1970 to 1980, followed by a slight increase afterwards. In case of women, a significant increase in the number of enrollment can be seen in both full-time as well as part-time education and this number is only going to increase further.
According to a survey conducted on the
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of males and females in Britain who opt for higher education, either full-time or part-time, is
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summarised
in the above bar graph.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the highest
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number
of male individuals who
are enrolled
full-time, was in the
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year
1970,
However
, regarding female individuals, the highest
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number
of full-time
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enrolment
was reported
in the
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year
1990s.
On the other hand
, in case of part-time education, both the genders
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saw
a
relatively
higher
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number
of enrollment in the
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year
1990.

In case of
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men
, more and more students preferred to study part-time over the years as compared to full-time where the total
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number
of students has decreased
slightly
from 1970 to 1980, followed by a slight increase afterwards. In case of women, a significant increase in the
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number
of enrollment can be
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seen
in both full-time
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as well as
part-time education and this
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number
is
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only
going to increase
further
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time

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