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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. m7lO
The poly-line graph depicts the number of admission in Australian universities by foreign pupils and local pupils between 2001 and 2010. From an overall perspective, it can be seen that the total enrollment of foreign students continuosly rose over the period. At the first year of period, there was the least gap of commencing students and total students about 10, 000 students, as time passed, this student gap was constantly increased from 10, 000 to 40, 000. Moreover, total admission of local students was significantly upsurged within a decade from 4 lac to plateau of 6 lac for last 4 years. However, the number of commencing local students was dropped noticably from the year 2002, with a small upward trend in 2007 and 2008. Overall, it can be said that their was the huge difference of local and foreign students admissions in the university in the 10 years.
The
poly
-line graph depicts the number of admission in Australian universities by foreign pupils and
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local
pupils between 2001 and 2010.

From an
overall
perspective, it can be
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seen
that the total enrollment of foreign
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students
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continuosly
rose over the period. At the
first
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of period, there was the least gap of commencing
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students
and total
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about 10, 000
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students
, as time passed, this
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gap was
constantly
increased from 10, 000 to 40, 000.

Moreover
, total admission of
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local
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students
was
significantly
upsurged within a decade from 4 lac to plateau of 6 lac for last 4 years.
However
, the number of commencing
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local
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students
was dropped
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noticably
from the
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year
2002, with a
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small
upward trend in 2007 and 2008.

Overall
, it can
be said
that
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was the huge difference of
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local
and foreign
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students
admissions in the university in the 10 years.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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