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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. kqkW
The two line graphs illustrate the quantifies of internal students and external students who put onto Australian universities during a ten years from 2000 to 2010. Overall, during a decade, the numbers of abroad university students in commencing and total both increase considerably. The enrolments of Australian learners also rose significantly in total, while fluctuated markedly in commencing. There was a dramatic growth in numbers of enrolments of overseas students in total. According to the graph, the number of students who started joining Australia in 2001 was 20, 000, after nearly 10 years the number had reached four times in 2010. Similarly, the 400, 000 inland enrolments were made in 2001 and jumped to 600, 000 in 2007, then they remained stable for 3 years. To be specific in commencing, the amount overseas students gradually increased during the half period and sharply increased until 2009, then stablized until 2010. Difirent from students on overseas, the local students rose in two first year of the time frame, afterward, It fluctuated unevenly for the rest of the time. However, in 2010, the commencing local students was just equal 20 times of overseas students, respectively 200, 000 and 40, 000.
The two line graphs illustrate the quantifies of internal
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students
and external
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students
who put onto Australian universities during a ten years from 2000 to 2010.

Overall
, during a decade, the
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numbers
of abroad university
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students
in commencing and total both increase
considerably
. The
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enrolments
of Australian learners
also
rose
significantly
in total, while fluctuated
markedly
in commencing.

There was a dramatic growth in
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numbers
of
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enrolments
of
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overseas
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students
in total. According to the graph, the
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number
of
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students
who
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started
joining Australia in 2001 was 20, 000, after
nearly
10 years the
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number
had reached four
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times
in 2010.
Similarly
, the 400, 000 inland
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enrolments
were made
in 2001 and jumped to 600, 000 in 2007, then they remained stable for 3 years.

To be specific in commencing, the amount
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overseas
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students
gradually
increased during the half period and
sharply
increased until 2009, then
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stablized
until 2010.
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Difirent
from
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students
on
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overseas
, the local
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students
rose in two
first
year of the
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time
frame, afterward, It fluctuated
unevenly
for the rest of the
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.
However
, in 2010, the commencing local
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was
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equal 20
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times
of
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overseas
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students
,
respectively
200, 000 and 40, 000.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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