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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. jq9d
The graph illustrates the enrolment of students from overseas and local in universities of Australia over the time of ten years. we can clearly see that the increase in commencing and total students who are from local and overseas. The first graph represents the students commencing in Australian universities gradually increased from the year 2001- 2009. In 2001 students from overseas commencing studies are below 20000. and it increased year by year and stopped at 40000 in the year 2009. and be constant in 2010. the total number of students from overseas increases yearly where in 2001 it is about 20000 and in the year 2008 and 2009 were more than 60000 and 78000 respectively. The second graph represents the students commencing in Australian universities in the year 2001 are below 200000 and increased in the year 2002 up to 210000 and decreased in the year 2003 up to 200000 and constantly decreased in the year 2006 up to below 200000 and increased in the year 2007. and ended at 200000 in the year 2010. where the total number of local students are 400000 in 2001 gradually increased up to 60000 in 2007 and being constant till 2010. overall we can see more enrolments in students overseas students. and in local people more enrolments in total students.
The graph illustrates the
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in universities of Australia over the time of ten years.
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and overseas.

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first
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commencing
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gradually
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2001- 2009
. In 2001
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studies are below 20000.
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2009.
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be constant in 2010.
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the
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number of
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increases yearly where in 2001 it is about 20000 and in the
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2008 and 2009 were more than 60000 and 78000
respectively
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The second graph represents the
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2001 are below 200000 and
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2002 up to 210000 and decreased in the
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2003 up to 200000 and
constantly
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2006 up to below 200000 and
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2007.
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2010.
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where
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number of
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local
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are 400000 in 2001
gradually
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up to 60000 in 2007 and being constant till 2010.

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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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