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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. VNw7
The line graphs illustrate the universities enlistment of native and international students in Australia between the year 2001 and 2010 and split it to commencing and total group. From an overall perspective, it was apparent that there were some rising of students enrollment in Australian universities. At the beginning of the graph, overseas students were less than 2, 000 in 2001 but then doubled and crossed the number of 4, 000 students in 2010 which indicates the upward trend. The red line, represent the total amount, also consistently increased from 20, 000 students to over 80, 000 students in ten-year period. In contrast, the commencing number of australian students did not increase a lot. Though there were some rising between 2001 and 2002, it was unstable throughout the years and slightly fall to approximately 20, 000 in 2010. However, the total enrollment in Australian universities swiftly increased and remain stable since 2007 until the end of the graph.
The line graphs illustrate the
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enlistment of native and international
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students
in Australia between the year 2001 and 2010 and split it to commencing and total group. From an
overall
perspective, it was apparent that there were
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rising of
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enrollment in Australian universities.

At the beginning of the graph, overseas
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were less than 2, 000 in 2001
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then doubled and crossed the number of 4, 000
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students
in 2010 which indicates the upward trend. The red line, represent the total amount,
also
consistently
increased from 20, 000
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students
to over 80, 000
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students
in ten-year period.

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, the commencing number of
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australian
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students
did not increase a lot. Though there were
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rising between 2001 and 2002, it was unstable throughout the years and
slightly
fall to approximately 20, 000 in 2010.
However
, the total enrollment in Australian universities
swiftly
increased and remain stable since 2007 until the
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