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The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015

The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015 ab7V
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the adult population who were overweight or obese in one country between 1965 and 2015, while the pie chart outlines the weight range of people who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015. It is clear from the bar chart that the percentage of overweight or obese adults increased between 1965 and 2015, from around 47% to almost 75%. The pie chart reveals that in 2015 over 70% of adults were too heavy. According to bar chart, the rise in the number of people who are overweight or obese was gradual from 1965 to 1985. The first significant increase occurred between 1985 and 1995, from about 48% to around 60%. In the next ten-year period there was a similar, slightly large rise. By 2015, approximately 75% of people weighted too much. The pie chart presents in 2015 only under a third of people were healthy and underweight. Over 70% of adults were overweight, obese or severely obese. The percentage of people who were dangerously fat and their health was seriously at risk, was 6%.
The bar
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illustrates the percentage of the adult population
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who
were
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overweight
or
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obese
in one country between 1965 and 2015, while the pie
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chart
outlines the weight range of
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people
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who
were
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overweight
,
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obese
or
severely
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obese
in 2015.

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clear
from the bar
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chart
that the percentage of
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overweight
or
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obese
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adults
increased between 1965 and 2015, from around 47% to almost 75%. The pie
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chart
reveals that in 2015 over 70% of
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adults
were too heavy.

According to bar
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chart
, the rise in the number of
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people
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who
are
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overweight
or
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obese
was gradual from 1965 to 1985. The
first
significant increase occurred between 1985 and 1995, from about 48% to around 60%. In the
next
ten-year period there was a similar,
slightly
large rise. By 2015, approximately 75% of
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people
weighted too much.

The pie
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chart
presents in 2015
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only
under a third of
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people
were healthy and underweight. Over 70% of
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adults
were
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overweight
,
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obese
or
severely
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obese
. The percentage of
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people
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who
were
dangerously
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fat
and their health was
seriously
at
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risk
, was 6%.

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015

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