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The bar chart represents the data about percentage of people in the UK that are ate fruit and vegetables five times a day in seven year period from 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart represents the data about percentage of people in the UK that are ate fruit and vegetables five times a day in seven year period from 2001 and 2008. OGwM
The bar chart represents the data about percentage of people in the UK that are ate fruit and vegetables five times a day in seven year period from 2001 and 2008. Obviously, people of all ages has the best interest to this kind of food at 2006, however after that people become less interested. For instance, woman has the most interest in this kind of food, compared to men for example. Children had the lowest rate of all times, but as time pass they gets much interested in this food. Significant improvement can be seen at 2004 when all of the statistics got about 10% increase. But the peak of all of the data is on 2006, at that time all of the percentages had a similarly increase, compared to previous year. Although, by 2008 people had lost their interest in fruits and vegetables and all percentages had decreased to 2004 level. Accordingly to the data given, the interest to fruits and vegetables from people in the UK has a wave shape. As time pass, people become more or less interested at this food because of advertisement of different reasons.
The bar chart represents the data about percentage of
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people
in the UK that are ate fruit and vegetables five
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times
a day in
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seven year
period
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from 2001 and 2008
.
Obviously
,
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people
of all ages has the best
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interest
to this kind of
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food
at 2006,
however
after that
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people
become less interested.

For instance
, woman has the most
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interest
in this kind of
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food
, compared to
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men
for example
. Children had the lowest rate of all
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times
,
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but
as
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time
pass they
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gets
much interested in this
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food
. Significant improvement can be
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seen
at 2004 when
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all of the
statistics
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got
about 10% increase.

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But
the peak of
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all of the
data is on 2006, at that
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time
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all of the
percentages had a
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similarly increase
, compared to previous year. Although, by 2008
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people
had lost their
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interest
in fruits and vegetables and all percentages had decreased to 2004 level.

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Accordingly
to the data
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given
, the
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interest
to fruits and vegetables from
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people
in the UK has a wave shape. As
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time
pass,
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people
become more or less interested at this
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food
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because
of
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advertisement of
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different
reasons.

IELTS academic The bar chart represents the data about percentage of people in the UK that are ate fruit and vegetables five times a day in seven year period from 2001 and 2008.

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190 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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