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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. OVg2M
As it is apparent, the grath illustrates the enrolments of both foriegn and local students in Australian universities for more than a ten year duration. To begin with, I woul like to point out that according to the graph for students from abroad and also the local ones the commencing line is overall ascending but with a bit difference which is that an descending time period from 2002 to 2006 can be viewed one the local students graph. In addition, the maximum number of enrolment for overseas students is less than the one for local students with it being approximately 80000 and the other being 600000. Also, the total line that belongs to local students seems that it has stopped growing in number after 2007 whereas in the other graph the digit of enrolment is consistently increasing. In general, it appears that the graph that is for foriegn studens has had a much more growth rate in comparison to the students that are a part of the Austrailian community during this period of time.
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enrolments
of both
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foriegn
and
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students
in Australian universities for more than a
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like to point out that according to the graph for
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students
from abroad and
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the
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local
ones the commencing line is
overall
ascending
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an
descending time period from 2002 to 2006 can
be viewed
one the
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local
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students
graph.

In addition
, the maximum number of
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enrolment
for overseas
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students
is less than the one for
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local
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students
with it being approximately 80000 and the other being 600000.

Also
, the total line that belongs to
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local
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students
seems that it has
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stopped
growing in number after 2007 whereas in the other graph the digit of
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enrolment
is
consistently
increasing.

In general
, it appears that the graph
that is
for
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foriegn
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studens
has had a much more growth rate
in comparison
to the
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students
that are a part of the
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Austrailian
community during this period of time.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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