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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. KRpM
The given diagrams above present a rate of foreign and regional undergraduates in high educational institutions in Australia from 2001 till 2010 years. Overall, it is explicitly conspicuous that in both occasion the number of commencing and total local students is exceeded under foreign ones. According to the graph lines, it can be noticed a dramatic growth by abroad students generally from 20000 in 2001 to over 80000 in 2010. It could be seen that since 2006 there started a rapid rise of applicants between international students. The number of applying ones by foreigners was increased almost by 2 times: from about 17000 to 40000. It is obviously clear from graph that since 2006 the total number of local students remained stable for 4 years: 600000. In conclusion, it is clearly observed that commenced number of Australian students were exsisted approximately the same index: about 200000. While the total rate of total local undergraduates has a huge growing for 6 years.
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diagrams above present a rate of foreign and regional undergraduates in high educational institutions in Australia
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from 2001 till 2010
years.

Overall
, it is
explicitly
conspicuous that in both occasion the
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number
of commencing and
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total
local
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students
is exceeded
under foreign ones.

According to the graph lines, it can
be noticed
a dramatic growth by abroad
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students
generally
from 20000 in 2001 to over 80000 in 2010. It could be
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seen
that since 2006 there
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started
a rapid rise of applicants between international
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students
. The
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number
of applying ones by foreigners
was increased
almost by 2 times: from about 17000 to 40000. It is
obviously
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clear
from graph that since 2006 the
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total
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number
of local
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students
remained stable for 4 years: 600000.

In conclusion
, it is
clearly
observed that commenced
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number
of Australian
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students
were
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exsisted
approximately the same index: about 200000. While the
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total
rate of
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local undergraduates has a huge growing for 6 years.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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