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The graphs below show basic information about employment among people with and without disabilities in a certain country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The graphs below show basic information about employment among people with and without disabilities in a certain country. RNLXW
These two given bar charts represent some primary details about the employment situation off three types of people. The types are people who are not disabled, people with non-intense disability, and those who are extremely disabled. In an overview, it is readily noticeable that's highly injured people or getting lower salaries and also, so their employment ratio is much lower than others as well. Talking about employment people with no incapacities and people with non-severely disabilities or getting employed approximately the same number which is 90%. Whereas around only 25% of people with more intense injuries are getting the jobs they applied for. The trend in employment of these three groups is also seeable in their monthly wages too. Healthy people are getting paid almost as twice as handicapped folks and they're also paid near 500 dollars more than those with this serious problems. Severely disabled people are only getting 1000 dollars in average each month, while the healthy people are getting around $2, 000 for their work.
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who are not disabled,
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ratio is much lower than others
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with more intense injuries are getting the jobs they applied for.

The trend in
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of these three groups is
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seeable
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getting 1000 dollars in average each month, while the healthy
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are getting around $2, 000 for their work.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show basic information about employment among people with and without disabilities in a certain country.

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6.0
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