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The graphs below give information about obesity in five countries, and food energy intake and expenditure in the United Kingdom (UK) and Japan over several decades. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about obesity in five countries, and food energy intake and expenditure in the United Kingdom (UK) and Japan over several decades. LB66K
The bar graph under inform about obesity in five states(Mexico, UK, Germany, Italy and japan) and the line graph under shows the food energy intake and expenditure in the united kingdom and Japan. (1969 to 1986 and 1989 to 2009) Overall we can see the bar graph is adults the obese percent of people 15 years and older to 15years. On the other hand the line graph intake and expenditure is shoes is kilojoules per day for adults the UK and Japan. In the beginning of the abesity is highest percentage in the Mexico 70% and the UK and Germany are almost 60 and 50 percent respectively. Italy and Japan are 45 to 25 percent in the population of obesity. In the begin of line graph illustrate the food and drink energy intake and expenditure in kilojoules per day and 1969 to 1989. The intake in the UK is Increased in 8000 to 9000 and 1989 to 2009 in 9000 to 11000 and the Intake Japan is 1969 to 1989 is 7000 to 8000 and the an 1989 to 2009 is 8000. On the other hand side expenditure in the UK in 1969 to 1989 is decrease in 4000 to 3000 and the year 1989 to 2009 is similar in Japan and the expenditure in Japan is year 1969 to 1989 4000 to 3000.
The bar
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under inform about obesity in five states(Mexico, UK, Germany, Italy and
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japan)
and the line
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under
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shows
the food energy
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intake
and
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expenditure
in the
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united kingdom
and
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Japan
. (1969 to 1986 and 1989 to 2009)

Overall
we can
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see
the bar
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is adults the obese percent of
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people
15 years and older to 15years.
On the other hand
the line
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graph
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intake
and
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expenditure
is shoes is kilojoules per day for adults the UK and Japan.

In the beginning of the
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abesity
is
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percentage in the Mexico 70% and the UK and Germany are almost 60 and 50 percent
respectively
. Italy and
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Japan
are 45 to 25 percent in the population of obesity.

In the
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begin
of line
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illustrate the food and drink energy
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intake
and
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expenditure
in kilojoules per day and 1969 to 1989. The
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intake
in the UK
is Increased
in 8000 to 9000 and 1989 to 2009 in 9000 to 11000 and the
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Intake
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Japan
is 1969 to 1989 is 7000 to 8000 and
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1989 to 2009 is 8000.
On the other hand
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expenditure
in the UK in 1969 to 1989 is decrease in 4000 to 3000 and the
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1989 to 2009 is similar in
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Japan
and the
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expenditure
in
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is
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1969 to 1989 4000 to 3000.
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