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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The given graphs depicts the information of computer ownership over increasing years as well as education. This essay explains different observations from the figures. Overall, as the technology started to rise every passing year, people started buying computers consequently most of the population owned a system by the end of 2010. These buying rates effected by education level owing the fact that people with highest qualification needs one. By 2002, nearly 55 percentage have taken devices and this rate has slightly improved in 2004. By 2006 it has reached to 60% whereas rate spiked even more in 2008. We can see the peak at 2010 that 90 percent of the world has started computing. Educational degrees has played vital role in the purchases. People who doesn’t have even a single degree reported less usage in 2002 but they showed a little progress by 2010. Individuals with a post graduate qualification uses a bit high as a result their bar of use is nearly equal all the times, likewise, the graduates.
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IELTS academic The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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