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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. pkBy
The line graph illustrates a several passenger were using the National rail network, London Underground, light rail and metro system in The UK among 1956 to 2004/5. Overall, the number of trips made by traveller on the National rail and London underground almost same just 250 millions compared, however far outstipped metro system and light rail. In the other hand, The national rail network approximately 1957 soaring up around 1, 250 million, although down in 1980 it climbed again. Besides that light rial and metro system started from 1960 and it was hit a low in 1980 but rose slowly. By comparison, after the introduction in the 1960s, the light railway and metro system embarked on working unfavorably by carrying fewer passengers than the other two networks, no more than 5 or 1o million during the first year. However, in 1980s the the number of journeys create by travellers picked up, reaching nearly 150 million 2004/5.
The line graph illustrates a
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several passenger
were using the National
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rail
network, London Underground,
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light
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rail
and
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metro
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system
in The UK among 1956 to 2004/5.

Overall
, the number of trips made by
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traveller
on the National
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rail
and London underground almost same
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just
250
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millions
compared,
however
far
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outstipped
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metro
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system
and
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light
rail.

In the other hand, The national
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rail
network approximately 1957 soaring up around 1, 250
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million
, although down in 1980 it climbed again.
Besides
that
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light
rial and
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metro
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system
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started
from 1960 and it
was hit
a low in 1980
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but
rose
slowly
.

By comparison, after the introduction in the 1960s, the
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light
railway and
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metro
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system
embarked on working
unfavorably
by carrying fewer passengers than the other two networks, no more than 5 or 1o
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million
during the
first
year.
However
,
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in 1980s
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the the
number of journeys create by
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travellers
picked up, reaching
nearly
150
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million
2004/5.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5.

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