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The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

The flow chart shows the procedure of enrolment of high school gradutes into universities. Its quiet complicated but in this essay I will represent the process clearly. First of all, make sure that you are a high school graduate. After that, an application form is needed in order to join the university, people can download it simply from the website. After the form was send to the admin, there are three possible outcomes. First, after around two weeks, the administratoe would send you a letter asking for some more documents and personal information, after collecting all of those required, sent it again to the admin and wait for response. Second, a rejection letter might be received. Maybe the student is not qualified for the subject or whatsoever a reason, he/she can cancel the application, or to choose another major in the same university and again send it back to the authority. And last, the application will be accepted, which will also take two week a term, and there will be more procedures to complete. After completed the enrolment letter, subjects need to be picked, and after the student register with Dean, which is the school's director, then the gate of the university is open for him/her now. To sum it up, one should always collect every piece of information needed so that will cause less trouble in the enrolment peocedure. Also, there are a plenty of choices students can make when they are deciding to study in a university.
The flow chart
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shows
the procedure of enrolment of high school gradutes into
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universities
. Its quiet complicated
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but
in this essay I will represent the process
clearly
.

First
of all,
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make
sure that you are a high school graduate. After that, an application form
is needed
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the
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university
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can download it
simply
from the website.

After the form was
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send
to the admin, there are three possible outcomes.
First
, after around two weeks, the administratoe would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
you a letter asking for
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some
more documents and personal information, after collecting all of those required,
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sent
it again to the admin and wait for response.

Second, a rejection letter might
be received
. Maybe the student is not qualified for the subject or whatsoever a reason, he/she can cancel the application, or to choose another major in the same
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university
and again
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send
it back to the authority.

And last, the application will be
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accepted
, which will
also
take two week a term, and there will be more procedures to complete. After completed the enrolment letter, subjects need to
be picked
, and after the student register with Dean, which is the school's director, then the gate of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
is open for him/her
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now
.

To sum it up, one should always collect every piece of information needed
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so
that will cause less trouble in the enrolment peocedure.
Also
, there are a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of choices students can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
when they are deciding to study in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
249 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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