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The graph states the growth of the village called Reymouth over the period of 26 years from 1995.

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The graph states the growth of the village called Reymouth over the period of 26 years from 1995. Overall, it can be in seen that, there were enormous changes happened in the village since 1995. The most significant one is, the development of sports facilities in the north-east part of the village instead of farmland and forest park. Similarly, there were a lots of disappearance all fishing industry and development of new apartments and restaurants. In 1995, the majority of the north-east part of the village was surrounded by farmland and forest park while, it become golf and tennis at present. It reveals the deforestation of the village. Consequently, the agriculture vanished. There was a fish market in 1995, which was replaced by apartments. Hence fishing boats fade away. In the opposite side of fish market, there were 5 shops, which replaced by restaurants at present. The north-west part of the village comprises of the accommodation facility, there was an increase in the number of houses from 12 to 16 and the development of new road to the housing area are some other notable changes. The hotel is still there with an additional facility of car parking and the café remains unchangeable.
The graph states the growth of the
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Reymouth
over the period of 26 years from 1995.

Overall
, it can be in
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seen
that, there were enormous
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changes
happened in the
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village
since 1995. The most significant one is, the development of sports facilities in the north-east part of the
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village
instead
of farmland and forest park.
Similarly
, there were a
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lots of disappearance
all fishing industry and development of new apartments and restaurants.

In 1995, the majority of the north-east part of the
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village
was surrounded
by farmland and forest park while, it
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become
golf and tennis at present. It reveals the deforestation of the
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village
.
Consequently
, the agriculture vanished. There was a fish market in 1995, which
was replaced
by apartments.
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Hence
fishing boats fade away. In the opposite side of fish market, there were 5 shops, which replaced by restaurants at present.

The north-west part of the
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village
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comprises of
the accommodation facility, there was an increase in the number of
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houses
from 12 to 16 and the development of new road to the housing area are
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some
other notable
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changes
. The hotel is
still
there with an additional facility of car parking and the café remains unchangeable.

IELTS academic The graph states the growth of the village called Reymouth over the period of 26 years from 1995.

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