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The given diagram gives the information of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK joined arts events.

The given diagram gives the information of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK joined arts events. gYkYL
The given diagram gives the information of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK joined arts events. As shown in the illustration, the most common reason why adult people in the UK go to the arts events is to desire to see specific performer/artist. Which has always the top reason since 20 years ago. It is interesting to note that the second most common reason was for special occasion/celebration 20 years ago. However, it has changed today which is for acconmanying children. Now, turning to the details. The most common reason always takes up around 50% of the people who answered the question. On the other hand, only 9% people went to arts for accompanying children 20 years ago. It increases significantly in 20 years, it is obvious that more children are interested in arts today than 20 years ago. Although less adults join the arts events for special occasion/celebration today, more adults do that for work/business.
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20-year
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adults
in the UK
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joined
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arts
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events
.

As shown in the illustration, the most common
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reason
why adult
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people
in the UK go to the
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arts
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events
is to desire to
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see
specific performer/artist. Which has always the top
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reason
since 20 years ago. It is interesting to note that the second most common
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reason
was for special occasion/celebration 20 years ago.
However
, it has
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changed
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today
which is for
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acconmanying
children.

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Now
, turning to the
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details
. The most common
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reason
always takes up around 50% of the
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people
who answered the question.
On the other hand
,
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only
9%
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people
went to
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arts
for accompanying children 20 years ago. It increases
significantly
in 20 years, it is obvious that more children
are interested
in
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arts
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today
than 20 years ago. Although
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less
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adults
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join
the
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arts
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events
for special occasion/celebration
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today
, more
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adults
do that for work/business.
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IELTS academic The given diagram gives the information of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK joined arts events.

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3 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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