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The graph shows the worldwide global sales of two mobile phone brands Nokia and Samsung between 2012 and 2020.

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The line graphs elucidate the number of mobile phones made in the world by 2 major companies, namely Samsung and Nokia over 8 years period between 2012 and 2020. Overall, what stands out is that there were considerably upward brands in the made of Samsung and Nokia. Another interesting point is that Samsung was the most popular brand in 2016. But in 2018, Nokia was levelled off in the last two years. Looking at the details, as regards Samsung. Making started at roughly 400 in 2012. The world's demand for Samsung branded telephones doubled rose from 300 to 500. Then there was a fluctuation over the next four years, at which point it levelled off at just under 600 from 2018 till 2020. The number of cell phones sold by Samsung was the highest over the projected periods. It can be observed that the mobile phones for Nokia had reserve trand, although the phones sold at almost 400 in the same years as Samsung. Nokia was went down gradually from 400 till 270 in 2014. Having remained stable at almost 300 till 2017. Make then rose sharply, reaching nearly 550 in 2019. From that year, the figure of Nokia's phones were levelled of till in the end of year.
The line graphs elucidate the number of mobile
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made in the world by 2 major
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companies
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namely
Samsung and Nokia over 8 years period between 2012 and 2020.

Overall
, what stands out is that there were
considerably
upward brands in the made of Samsung and Nokia. Another interesting point is that Samsung was the most popular brand in 2016.
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But
in 2018, Nokia
was levelled
off in the last two years.

Looking at the
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details
, as regards Samsung. Making
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started
at roughly 400 in 2012.

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next
four years, at which point it levelled off at
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just
under 600
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from 2018 till 2020
. The number of cell
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phones
sold by Samsung was the highest over the projected periods.

It can
be observed
that the mobile
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phones
for Nokia had reserve
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trand
, although the
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phones
sold at almost 400 in the same years as Samsung. Nokia was
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went
down
gradually
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from 400 till 270
in 2014. Having remained stable at almost 300 till 2017.
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Make
then rose
sharply
, reaching
nearly
550 in 2019. From that
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year
, the figure of Nokia's
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phones
were levelled
of till in the
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end
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