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Rainwater Collection in an Australian Town

Rainwater Collection in an Australian Town 3A2M5
The diagram illustrates how the collected rainwater is processed in order to utilize as drinking water in a town in Australia. Overall, the rainwater collected from houses can be used for drinking purpose only after it is filtered and treated with chemicals. Initially the rain seeps into the drain due to the tilted roof and water now travels along the pipe to reach a water filter where impurities are segregated. The partially pure rainwater further moves to a storage tank with the help of a pipe. Furthermore, water encounters a water treatment tank where it is treated with certain chemicals which make the processed rainwater completely safe for drinking. Once the entire purification is completed, pure water is pushed up to the house through a different pipe. Using this simple technique, a town in Australia is able to purify the rainwater allowing the people to use the same water for their daily requirements.
The diagram illustrates how the collected
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rainwater
is processed
in order to utilize as drinking
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water
in a town in Australia.

Overall
, the
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rainwater
collected from
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houses
can be
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used
for drinking purpose
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only
after it
is filtered
and treated with chemicals.

Initially
the rain seeps into the drain due to the tilted roof and
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water
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now
travels along the pipe to reach a
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water
filter where impurities
are segregated
. The
partially
pure
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rainwater
further
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moves
to a storage tank with the
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help
of a pipe.

Furthermore
,
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water
encounters a
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water
treatment tank where it
is treated
with certain chemicals which
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make
the processed
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rainwater
completely safe for drinking. Once the entire purification
is completed
, pure
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water
is pushed
up to the
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house
through a
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different
pipe. Using this simple technique, a town in Australia is able to purify the
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rainwater
allowing the
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people
to
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use
the same
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water
for their daily requirements.

IELTS academic Rainwater Collection in an Australian Town

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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