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The pie charts below show the consumption of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

The pie charts below show the consumption of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years. x21gg
The given pie charts represent the comparison of various sources of energy consumption of the UK between 2000 and 2010. The general overview hre is ththat in 2010, the proportion of gas, coal, solar and others usages have increased from 2000, while there was a decline in prtrol comsumption over the past 10 years. According to the pie charts, the highest level amount of using energy was occupied by coal with 30 per cent in 2000, followed by gas, petrol aolar and others, with the figure being 29. 5 per cent, 29 per cent, 6. 5 per cent and 5 per cent, respectively. On the contrary, it can be seen that there was an obviously reduction of petrol consumption in the UK was resposible for 20 per cent in 2010, come after by the growth of coal, gas solar and the other usages, the figure rise to 31 per cent, 30 per cent, 10 per cent and 9 per cent, sequentially. To sum up, over the apst 10 years, petrol consumption was less popular among the other utilizations.
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pie charts represent the comparison of various sources of energy consumption of the UK between 2000 and 2010.

The general overview
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hre
is
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ththat
in 2010, the proportion of gas, coal, solar
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and others
usages have increased from 2000, while there was a decline in
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prtrol
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comsumption
over the past 10 years.

According to the pie charts, the highest level amount of using energy
was occupied
by coal with 30 per cent in 2000, followed by gas, petrol
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aolar
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and others
, with the figure being 29. 5 per cent, 29 per cent, 6. 5 per cent and 5 per cent,
respectively
.

On the contrary
, it can be
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seen
that there was an
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obviously reduction
of petrol consumption in the UK was
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resposible
for 20 per cent in 2010,
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come
after by the growth of coal, gas solar and the
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other
usages, the figure rise to 31 per cent, 30 per cent, 10 per cent and 9 per cent,
sequentially
.

To sum up, over the
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apst
10 years, petrol consumption was less popular among the
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other
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utilizations
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the consumption of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

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