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The graph shows the water consumption in Australia.

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The bar graph illustrates the data of water consumption in Australia from the year 1993 to 2005. Firstly, in 1993-1994 the use of aqua was about 18500 gallons. in the following year it had taken rise up to 21100 gallons. furthermore there was a fall in the utility of the water to 19900 gallons. After that, in the year 1996-1997 hydra consumption has reached to the top of the mountain by 22100 gallons where as there was a decline in the year 20000-20001. and in the next year utility of the water has totally decreased to 18900 gallons. Overall, there was a fluctuations in the water usage in Australia between the year 1993 and 2005. In the starting of the year the consumption rate of water was at the lowest point and certainly in the middle era it has expanded, but at last there was fall in the hydra consumption.
The bar graph illustrates the data of
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in Australia from the
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1993 to 2005.
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it had taken rise up to
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21100 gallons
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there was a fall in the utility of the
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to
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19900 gallons
. After that, in the
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1996-1997 hydra
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consumption
has reached to the top of the mountain by
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22100 gallons
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there was a decline in the
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20000-20001.
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next
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utility of the
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has
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decreased to
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18900 gallons
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Overall
,
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there was a fluctuations
in the
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water
usage in Australia between the
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1993 and 2005. In the starting of the
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the
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consumption
rate of
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was at the lowest point and
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in the middle era it has expanded,
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at last there was fall in the hydra
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consumption
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