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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram provides information about how honey produced by bees. Overall, it is seen clearly from the given process chart of the honey that the process has total seven steps, which started with creating hires and ended with the final product of the honey in the last stage of the given diagram. To embarks with, a number of bees produce hives in the first step then they go to collect the nectar from flowers. Furthermore, in step 3 and step 4, nectars were collected by bees, which transferred into the cell via bees. Moreover, in step 5, bees try to cool down a sweet liquid produced by the flowers via using their wings as a fan after this step, the nectar goes for the next stage. By contrast, in step 6, water evaporation plays its role naturally after complete this process then the honey produced as a final product in the last stage of the given process.
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diagram provides information about how honey produced by bees.

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chart of the honey that the
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has total seven
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with creating hires and ended with the final product of the honey in the last stage of the
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diagram.

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then they go to collect the nectar from flowers.
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nectars
were collected
by bees, which transferred into the cell via bees.
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5, bees try to cool down a sweet liquid produced by the flowers via using their wings as a fan after this
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, the nectar goes for the
next
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6, water evaporation plays its role
naturally
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then the honey produced as a final product in the last stage of the
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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