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The graph shows the spent money in entertainment features in five year of period.

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The bar graph illustrates the ratio of three countries used money in cinema,  video,  music, publishing and television between 1995 and 2000. Overall, it can be seen that spend money in cinema  was lower in all year and highest score in a publishing Tobegin with,  in Asia the ratio of spend money in the cinema and video was lowest in 1995 at 55 and its  same of the lowest in other two countries.  There  were highest publishing in year 2000 of the United Kingdom. Furthermore, in Europe the ratio of publishing is also  rise in all country. However, in Asia the televion was under 50 and in  Europe there was a lower in year 1995 than the year  of 2000.  United Kingdom was a higher in all entertainment features and also than the all year televion was lowest under a 100.  Europe was a developed in 2000 in all the features than the Asia.
The bar graph illustrates the ratio of three countries 
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video,
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music, publishing and television between 1995 and 2000.
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was lower in all year and highest score in a publishing

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in Asia the ratio of spend money in the cinema and video was lowest in 1995 at 55 and its
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same of the lowest in other two countries.  There
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were 
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highest
 publishing in year 2000 of the United Kingdom.
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also
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 in all country.
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televion
 was under 50 and in
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Europe there was a lower in year 1995 than the year
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of 2000.  United Kingdom was a higher in all entertainment features and 
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 than the all year 
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televion
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 under a 100.  Europe was a developed in 2000 in all the features than the Asia.

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