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The graph shows the percentages is of males and females who hold each type of qualification in New Zealand in 2005.

The graph shows the percentages is of males and females who hold each type of qualification in New Zealand in 2005. Kpgk
The below graph illustrates the percentage of individual genders in New Zealand who holds the different types of Qualification in 2005. Overall, it is clear that more Males holding the Trade Certificate almost nine times that of Females. They also have excessive scores in higher education like Postgraduate Diploma and Masters. In contrast to this, the Females Qualifications are more in Diploma and Undergraduate Degree programs. In Trade Certificate the percentage of males is about 88, and the Females are below 15. Furthermore, the Tertiary Qualification of the males is also high in Postgraduate Diploma and Masters of about 62% and 75%. When compared to males the Females are only higher in two Tertiary Qualifications. One of them is Diploma Program and the other one is Undergraduate Degree. The percentage in these programs are about 63 and 56. Females are more interested in undergraduate qualification only. While, in Postgraduate Diploma they are about 38% and in masters 26% of them are participated.
The below graph illustrates the percentage of individual genders in New Zealand who holds the
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and Undergraduate Degree programs. In Trade Certificate the percentage of
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